Go back and look at your previous post. Move the labels that describe the rules for writing speech into the appropriate column for you. After reviewing your original post put those things you already knew into that first box. Look at your dialogue and identify the things you did correctly - these go into the "Things I do now...". Everything else will go into the "Things I am not doing consistently yet.." column.
We are learning to accurately write dialogue in class at the moment. We are learning the rules around punctuation and structure.